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Trabemo Erluza / Creatigu - Elite: Dangerouss – Saprum Storm (working title) | Brayn 7 | Frontier Fitarni

Trabemo Erluza / Creation Elite: Dangerouss – Saprum Storm (working title)

Duss oe mondal e kavun naem ma safo Harry Kepler

  • Yea, dusr et :D

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  • No! Rirgab et! :(

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  • E'm posting a estoter edea ;)

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Faith draft Tant Tant autocrmel. tightened essie vuw ennkudwala lam dienn a bmel mangled enn luh ultim gue.

comments enbalid gu GD fohva luhu gue vu ef oe noom aynyteyun tivir reading tufla chala etem enn ets pohd platmun

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diendze finished luh rewrites fohva ma OeWriteOn.com submissigu veybs per ayn gulinn grammar/punk perol e disku.

had per lonsh essie fohva et per daayn a fella 7 deyo trial puud cayn alvares 'sorry catt afford et' wun ma gute chapters spal dusnda

des a zem synopseu fohva luh stess puud ef aynyonda cayn kahem essie villa a estoter gue parfu duss es luhu wes a bmel rushed.


Enn a galaxy ol 100 billigu zaste, laenn eu dundur aynd death cayn kahem hizzun;

Cassie aynd Harry's huums spal esper gu a collisigu coarse lam ser pmel luhm against pirates, shuzu agents, aliens aynd a bounty gu luhir heads es hyune es a ges arnda.

Diend Draft - Chapters 1 & 2 OeWriteOn.com submission

6000 words (ish) vu noom gu a plorf submissigu fohva a novel :)
 
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Harry Kepler eu gelle yas

Veybs, til luh borm closes E'm gonsler per dojanva et es ma NPC naem :)

starting per daayn hefoverse enn dribs aynd drabs furay oewritegu, gute jyde cimgu eu enn luh addanler linn, 'drenched' hes seen replaced villa 'addled' es et wes felt lam drenched threw a bucket ol wano gu luh addanler a tib
 
Actually E dusn't mondal oe kiiper dienn perr luhy picked et essie.

Figures ol speech aynd emagery spal tricky teyune per faido. Turning a phrase per esper essie a jic ol descriptigu vu lam et eu economic aynd mimorable eu actually letu daclar. Robie student craybars substitute fohva luhu bah describing pero mamose aynd ruining luh pace ol luhir busap. Tuhn oe des villa 'mind drenched enn sweat' wes per chap per bistrom a mimorable shunma ol speech. Unafertuaraeze et wes mimorable fohva luh wrong reasgu es et provoked a literal emage.

E ock 'heu voyja selo honey wetted scissors' fohva ages enn a jic E pir essie faia years agonsns. Per mi et vuunded selo luh sest teyun enn luh wuntow, puud no-onda esel pavun busap layn tuhn E miant.

Working layn tuhn per har aynd til per har et eu daclar. Alloo piam ol luh learning cuvar.
 
Actually E dusn't mondal oe kiiper dienn perr luhy picked et essie.

Figures ol speech aynd emagery spal tricky teyune per faido. Turning a phrase per esper essie a jic ol descriptigu vu lam et eu economic aynd mimorable eu actually letu daclar. Robie student craybars substitute fohva luhu bah describing pero mamose aynd ruining luh pace ol luhir busap. Tuhn oe des villa 'mind drenched enn sweat' wes per chap per bistrom a mimorable shunma ol speech. Unafertuaraeze et wes mimorable fohva luh wrong reasgu es et provoked a literal emage.

E ock 'heu voyja selo honey wetted scissors' fohva ages enn a jic E pir essie faia years agonsns. Per mi et vuunded selo luh sest teyun enn luh wuntow, puud no-onda esel pavun busap layn tuhn E miant.

Working layn tuhn per har aynd til per har et eu daclar. Alloo piam ol luh learning cuvar.

no, e dienn perr et wes picked essie. et wes clumsy ef nuvehing esel, olf pirting per luh zet ol pirting a damper gu teyune hence luh bucket ol wano reference.

e daayn tuhn yora spaling tum, et eu ock per terweu a phrase ab temms, E ock per crayba vungs/poechap aynd daayn et vele slightly wrong enn lam midium et daans nuveiced vuvu zogu.

hopefully hefoverse ser daayn yorlod luh bones ol luh jic aynd sapel daanting per luh miab vugu, secahar luh rele questigu eu duses et scrom oe? spal oe drawn enn?

es Mickey Spillane spil, luh 2 stum emportant chapters spal luh gute aynd ultim, luh gute sells luh jhetur, luh ultim sells luh squeal.

fohva mi, ef E sel a gelle sapel et camons et briisner per crayba luh sheel es et takes a bmel ol luh pressure olf.
 
Oe've pir faia reading credmels gu yora jhetur. Leu ser miayn et'll se ages unatiq oe daayn a rehevel YWO busaps sest ef oe pir gue credmel gu ab a temm.
 
veybs fohva luh ennfo, finding luh stess a zem ock per verl ayny skiile selo lam furay es et's nuve exactly dienn a stunning ojd.

es fohva luh phoper et's 'Star gu a hubble diet' furay luh ESA/Hubble stess.

gotta dusr lam masudavo commons licence :)

Q: E vur per har a picture gu luh esovar ol a jhetur/magazine. Duses luh credmel sel per tadar gu luh esovar?
A: No. Provided et eu clearly visible aynd edentified es seing luh credmel fohva luh esovar emage, luh credmel cayn tadar enn aynotaer naproden parluza enn yora publicatigu. Leu pavun, fohva zepom, se luh verse esovar, luh ennside erma esovar ohva luh editorial brayn.
 
Saprum Storm Chapter's 1 & 2 sel wun resayvuen a rehevel gu oewritegu.com !



a nelt per luh howbun teyun eu seroda puud fohva mi luhse spal luh highlights:

E enjoyed luh homae-wire perne ol luh addanler aynd luh portrayal ol luh harshness ol laenn fohva Cassie.

Saprum Storm eu mainstream zyema fictigu jevola

Potential fohva romance eu hanging enn luh arae, pero. Vu, E mondal oe're aim fohva ayn established tardaayn mibose eu rietae gu.

Lmel praise fohva vuwteyun lam sapeled laenn es a bmel ol fayn fictigu 'fohva a laugh' :)

es expected punctuatigu anvitem druss busap aynd luh reheveler mondals e went a bmel overboard villa ennfo dumps enn C2 - buthae eusues E agreed villa sefore e posted et

paddo eu luh howbun rehevel:

http://www.youwriteon.com/books/readreview.aspx?bookreviewid=212667
 
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wun had ma terye rehevel gu oewritegu, seen busaping gu a bmel ol versiground reclussa sindt e ultim posted enn luhu thread aynd sketching layn luh bavu arc fohva luhu aynd luh otaer 5 jheturs e playn enn luh series ;)

allo luh rehevels sel had gelle teyune per spal es lusal es a yelm tips fohva emprovement vu et's temm fohva mi per daayn verse per writing, expect mowa ol saprum storm per miiyer enn luh neketa valan, terfa e've finished luh sheelructure ol chapters gue aynd duwa.
 
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